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Title: Writing my autobiography, need feedback.
Post by: Jason on January 30, 2008, 09:38:46 PM

For me, there have been many twists and turns in this crazy journey we call life, some good and some not so good. At times I have found myself among the upper echelons of high society, at others among the worst dregs of humanity. My journey's purpose is unknown, my final destination a mystery, but I do know this much - its been one helluva ride so far.

That's all I have so far, please let me know what you think.

Title: Re: Writing my autobiography, need feedback.
Post by: Gilly on January 30, 2008, 09:44:49 PM

Green light!

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Post by: erika on January 30, 2008, 10:48:30 PM

It needs more emoticons.

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Post by: Matt on January 31, 2008, 01:29:47 AM

Whenever possible, you should pose questions to yourself, a la Robert Evans. (a.k.a. Kid Notorious)

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Post by: Sarah on January 31, 2008, 07:36:58 AM

I've read worse.  No, really.  (Sad, ain't it?)

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Post by: A.M. Thomas on January 31, 2008, 08:46:31 AM

I especially like the part about your life.

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Post by: Oogie on January 31, 2008, 11:53:28 AM

I'll do the next paragraph:

I was born a poor rubber miner in the Belgian Congo. My father, like so many other chimney-sweeps, had descended on the Dark Continent during the Rubber Rush of '89, his head bouncing with dreams of the mythical Vulcan Kingdom. What was supposed to be a life of ease turned quickly to horror when he succumbed to the dreaded Latex Fever and was sent to a rubber room. Jervis Mcgillicutty Slackworth would remain there for the rest of his life. His polymer dreams had forever lost their elasticity.

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Post by: Chris L on January 31, 2008, 03:06:28 PM

I'm steeling myself for the tragic "FOT mixtape" chapter.

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Post by: bruce on January 31, 2008, 03:55:49 PM

Quote from: Chris L on January 31, 2008, 03:06:28 PM

I'm steeling myself for the tragic "FOT mixtape" chapter.

Just like some of the great ideas of Orson Welles this to has been lost to history.

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Post by: samir on February 01, 2008, 10:34:16 AM

Jason, I'm eager to read the section where you talk about the mean streets of North London.
Habs 4 Life!

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Post by: Rainer on February 01, 2008, 09:45:58 PM

Please write phonetically. I don't speak English.

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Post by: <<<<< on February 01, 2008, 09:47:42 PM

Epic!

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Post by: Shaggy 2 Grote on February 02, 2008, 01:11:51 PM

It's a great start, but I'd advise making a few cuts - the middle part goes on a bit long.